雅思作文范文赏析—中学毕业后的“间隔年”要怎么表达

学习啦在线学习网雅思作文范文赏析—中学毕业后的“间隔年”要怎么表达

　　本文给大家介绍雅思写作关于间隔年的考官范文，重点学习考官是如何入题、如何立论、如何论述、如何结尾，还有如何承接过渡的。总之就是学习这些范文的骨架是如何搭建的。

学习啦在线学习网 　　给大家讲解文章逻辑结构的题目选自剑桥系列丛书中最重要的题目之一：

学习啦在线学习网 　　In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this. (某事件利弊探讨)

　　此题讨论的问题是著名的“间隔年”，学生中学毕业后是否应该take a year off?

　　参考范文一：侧重支持taking a gap year

学习啦在线学习网 　　It is quite common these days for young people in many countries to have a break from studying after graduating from high school. The trend is not restricted to rich students (who have the money to travel), but is并列谓语 also evident among poorer students (who choose to work and become economically independent for a period of time).具象思维Generally, I think that this practice could lead to many desirable results.

　　立论段：

学习啦在线学习网 　　The reasons for this trend may involve the recognition that同位语从句 a young adult who passes directly from school to university is rather restricted in terms of general knowledge and experience of the world. By contrast, those who have spent some time earning a living or travelling to other places, have a broader view of life and better personal resources to draw on. They tend to be more independent, which is a very important factor in academic study and research, as well as giving them an advantage in terms of coping with the challenges of students life.

　　Outline:

学习啦在线学习网 　　1)general knowledge and experience of the world

学习啦在线学习网 　　have a broader view of life and better personal resources to draw on

　　2)tend to be more independent

学习啦在线学习网 　　a very important factor in academic study and research

　　giving them an advantage in terms of coping with the challenges of students life

　　give sb. an edge/advantage in sth. 给某人某方面的优势

　　驳论段：

　　However, there are certainly dangers in taking time off at that important age. Young adults may end up never returning to their studies or finding it difficult to readapt to an academic environment. They may think that it is better to continue in a particular job, or to do something completely different from a university course. But overall, I think it is less likely today, when academic qualifications文凭 are essential for getting a reasonable career.

学习啦在线学习网 　　My view is that young people should be encouraged to broaden their horizons. That is the best way for them to get a clear perspective of what they are hoping to do with their lives and why. Students with such a perspective are usually the most effective and motivated ones and并列句 taking a year off may be the best way to gain this.

　　本文是考官满分范文，建议6-7分学员认真学习内容。

　　分析：

　　有选择、有侧重的逻辑结构：

　　第一段：用简洁的语言直接引出讨论，学生无论贫富都可以选择take a gap year。写作开头简洁很重要。如果用看似华丽的套句会给人模板的感觉导致低分。

学习啦在线学习网 　　第二段：立论段：对比直接论证选择take the gap year学生更有优势。本段是议论文写作提出支持文章中心观点的分论点，并对其进行有效支持和扩展的部分，属于主要得分段落。

学习啦在线学习网 　　第三段：驳论段：先让步，说选择gap year的学生会面临的影响，但是又说明这种影响很容易避免，从而进一步论证自己的观点。一个优秀的考生除了能够使用恰当的论据支持自己的观点外，还必须能对自己相反的观点进行有效评价。

学习啦在线学习网 　　第四段：表明文章中心观点，倾向支持学生take the gap year。再次强调重要性。

学习啦在线学习网 　　关于这篇范文分析完毕，同学们对照着老师的分段分析可以进行其他范文的试答，相信会有不一样的收获。

　　-总结文章的论证，并且得出结论，再次表明文章批判性的中立观点。

　　-适当对文章的论证进行扩展和升华，可再次强调文章为何持有批判性中立观点，但切忌引入新观点和内容。