BEC中级作文从点评中提升写作水平
写作一直都是bec考试的一个难点，为了帮助大家备考，下面小编给大家分享一下BEC中级作文从点评中提升写作水平，希望能帮到你们！
BEC中级作文从点评中提升写作水平
近年来报考的学生数明显大幅上升。当然要得高分也不易，尤其是作文部分，由于BEC中级作文和我们传统的作文考试题要求相差较大，学生比较难以适应。很多考生对于BEC中级作文不知道如何下笔，主要原因在于平时的练习太少，脑子里也没有一定量的句型可用。下面是两篇范文和详细的点评，说不定也能发现自己练习时的问题。
首先一点，我们必须牢记，归根结底，BEC作文考察的还是考生英语表达能力。所以学生并不需要担心自己缺乏这方面的实际经验是否会影响考场发挥。(顺便提一句，BEC高级对商务知识的要求大大提高，因此考生要在语言功底上苦下功夫。比如说，写商务报告的固定格式必须牢记在心。)
PART ONE
You have been informed that next Wednesday your company's computer system will be closed down so that improvements can be made.
Write an email to all staff in your department:
? saying what time on Wednesday the system will be closed down
? suggesting how staff should prepare for this
学习啦在线学习网 ? saying how the system will be better after the improvements
学习啦在线学习网 Write 40--50 words
学生作文：
学习啦在线学习网 From: Jenny Xu
To: All Staff
Date: 5 April 2009
学习啦在线学习网 Subject: Computer System
学习啦在线学习网 I want to tell you that our Intranet based on Linux will be closed next Wednesday at 10 o’clock.. I want to suggesting that you should save all your important documents. The computer system will be faster because we will use a newer SAP system. The new system is according to ISO900 and we will benefit from that.
作文解析：
BEC中级作文解答时，审题非常重要。题目中给出的要求就好比是解代数题中已知条件，都要用到。小作文处理的时候，大家不妨可以把每一个已知条件扩写成一句句句子，同时兼顾句子之间的连接。
学习啦在线学习网 通常学生犯的错误是：
学习啦在线学习网 1. 漏掉题中给出的已知条件。
学习啦在线学习网 2. 给出的已知条件没有表达清楚，用词过于口语化，没有条理，暴露出语言功底薄弱。
3. 切忌过于花哨的发挥，多说多错。
学习啦在线学习网 这篇学生的作品是比较典型的案例。作者有一定的英语表达能力和工作经验，但文章中所暴露出来的不足也是明显的。写作不能从细处下笔，而是先要搭建框架。
以这篇习文为例，作者在具体语言的表达的雕琢上可圈可点，比如说第一个句子中based on引导的过去分词做后置定语，但是显而忘记了这篇文章的主要目的，那就是通知同事公司电脑系统要升级，但update这个词始终没有在文章中出现，因此读下来以后，可能同事还不是非常清楚，为什么computer system will be closed down, 尽管后面提到了improvement，总让人觉得有些如鲠在咽，言之不尽;因此，思路不清晰是这篇习文最大的问题。
此外，本文还有以下一些问题：
学习啦在线学习网 1. 有些用词过于口语化，比如说，文章开头, I want to tell you, 文中you should save这样的用语;
2. 建议Linux, 将SAP, ISO900等唬人术语统统除去，诚然BEC涉及到基本的商务知识，但是真正考核的还是语言功底，语用能力;商务知识好比是盖浇饭里面的小炒而已。
3.里面还有一个明显的语法错误，I want to suggesting….，当然阅卷者不会刻意去搜寻语法错误，而是综合考量语法得分，但由于小作文篇幅较短，那么这个错误就显得非常明显。
范文：
Please be informed that our computer system will be closed next Wednesday at 12 o'clock for system upgrade. The closure will last for at least two hours. Make sure that you have saved all your documents before that time. The whole system will run on a new server, much faster than the current one.
PART TWO
学习啦在线学习网 You work for PJT Ltd, a manufacturing company. You need more staff in your department and your line manager has asked you to write a report explaining why.
学习啦在线学习网 Look at the information below, on which you have already made some handwritten notes.Then, using all your handwritten notes, write your report.
Write 120-140 words.
学生作文：
The purpose of this report is to explain why we need more staff in our department.
学习啦在线学习网 We compare the number of staff in our department between 2001 and 2003, it only increased five staff. But the average number of ordered units grow up from 200000 to 400000 between 2001 and 2003.
Our sales department has announced a big new order from an international company recently. It will bring us much more workload. And the annual holiday increased to 5 weeks per year. That means that we have more workload and less working days.
If we had more staff the order should be on time. We should save our company’s reputation. And the workflow will be improved.
作文解析：
学习啦在线学习网 BEC中级大作文题型一般以写报告、书信为主，因此，这些必考问题的具体格式必须掌握。英文商务报告的格式有五个部分组成，其中包括报告的 Subject, Introduction (This report aims/sets out to……)，Findings (it was found that)， Conclusions(It was decided/agreed/felt that……)， Recommendations (It is suggested that…..) 括号中是每段开头固定的表达方式，考生不宜自己去创造。同样写信也有格式化的表达方式，再此恕不展开。 和第一部分一样，大作文的写作审题是第一步，所有给出的已知条件必须用足。
学习啦在线学习网 本文中出现的问题：
学习啦在线学习网 1.考生的习文字数恰当。但没有把报告应有的四个部分写完整，这将导致大量失分。在以上的习文中，考生表现出了不错的语言驾驭能力。
学习啦在线学习网 2.在审题上还有一些欠缺，比如 Another reason for more staff is that we will have fewer delays. 在题目中给出的已知条件中，有一份客户的投诉信件，应当作为佐证被引用，否则order should be on time无从谈起。
学习啦在线学习网 3.除了没有按照报告的固定格式外，考生语言太随意。比如说，our sales department has announced a big new order，没有出处，而根据文章中给出的已知条件，这是公司Newsletter所通告的，那么根据报告的要求，应该指出信息来源。
4.中国学生还普遍特别敏感的就是企业的信誉，因此经常会看到学生动辄就是喊口号的语言，比如说文中We should save our company’s reputation. 这样空洞无物的话应该避免。
学习啦在线学习网 5.还有就是细节处理，句子和段落之间连接忽略了。比如说，It will bring us much more workload. And the annual holiday increased to 5 weeks per year. 以及最后一句话And the workflow will be improved.其中的and 这个词用在这里显随意了些，可以考虑用Meanwhile 有“祸不单行”的意思。后面的And 应该删除。That means that we have more workload 这里两个that离的太近，可以考虑把后面一个去掉，同时时态应该是we will have。
范文：
学习啦在线学习网 Report on: More staff in our department
Date: 27.03.2004
学习啦在线学习网 Introduction
This report aims to explain why our department needs more staff.
Findings
学习啦在线学习网 Statistics show that there exists a big gap between the number of staff in our department and staff workload. While the number of ordered units grew up from only 200000 to 400000 in 2 years, the number of staff grew only by 5 people. According to the Staff Newsletter dated February 2004, we have won a big new order from an international company. That will bring us more work. At the same time, annual holiday has been increased to 5 weeks per year, meaning there won’t be enough staff for all the work. Our customer service department recently received a complaint from one of our clients about a tremendous delay in our delivery.
学习啦在线学习网 Conclusion
学习啦在线学习网 There are many reasons which explain the need of more staff. It is especially important for reducing the number of delays in delivery and to optimize the workflow.
学习啦在线学习网 Recommendations
More staff does not only mean more costs, it also means improved customer satisfaction.
BEC中级：商务英语写作套话汇编1
学习啦在线学习网 商业书信常用开头语
Opening Phrases & Sentences Generally Used In Business Letters
1. I will write you particulars in my next.
学习啦在线学习网 2. Particulars will be related in the following.
学习啦在线学习网 3. I will relate further details in the following.
学习啦在线学习网 4. I will inform you more fully in my next.
学习啦在线学习网 5. I will go (enter) into further details in my next.
如下列所记，如附件所述，等。
1. As stated below,
学习啦在线学习网 2. Annexed hereto,
3. Attached you will find...
4. As shown on the next page
学习啦在线学习网 5. As indicated overleaf(下页，背面)
6. As at foot hereof,
学习啦在线学习网 7. Sent with this,
8. As the drawings attached,
9. As shown in the enclosed documents,
学习啦在线学习网 10. As already mentioned,
学习啦在线学习网 11. As particularized on the attached sheet,
学习啦在线学习网 12. As detailed in the previous letter,
BEC中级：商务英语写作套话汇编2
我们盼望于近日内接获回信，等。
1. We hope to receive your favour at an early date.
2. We hope to be favoured with a reply with the least delay.
学习啦在线学习网 3. We await a good news with patience.
4. We hope to receive a favourable reply per return mail.
5. We await the pleasure of receiving a favourable reply at an early date.
6. We await the favour of your early (prompt) reply.
学习啦在线学习网 7. A prompt reply would greatly oblige us.
学习啦在线学习网 8. We trust you will favour us with an early (prompt) reply.
9. We trust that you will reply us immediately.
学习啦在线学习网 10. We should be obliged by your early (prompt) reply.
学习啦在线学习网 11. Will your please reply without delay what your wishes are in this matter?
12. Will you kindly inform us immediately what you wish us to do.
13. We request you to inform us of your decision by return of post.
学习啦在线学习网 14. We are awaiting (anxious to receive) your early reply.
学习啦在线学习网 15. We thank you for the anticipated favour of your early reply.
16. We should appreciate an early reply.
学习啦在线学习网 17. We thank you in anticipation of your usual courteous prompt attention.
学习啦在线学习网 18. We thank you now for the courtesy of your early attention.
学习啦在线学习网 19. We hope to receive your reply with the least possible delay.
学习啦在线学习网 20. Kindly reply at your earliest convenience.
21. Please send your reply by the earliest delivery.
BEC中级：商务英语写作套话汇编3
请原谅我的回信延迟……，等。
1. Please excuse my late reply to your very friendly letter of March 1.
2. I hope you will forgive me for not having written you for so long.
3. I hope you will excuse me for not having replied to you until today.
学习啦在线学习网 4. I humbly apologize you for my delay in answering to your kind letter of May 5.
5. I have to (must) apologize you for not answering your letter in time.
6. I must ask you to kindly accept our excuses, late as they are.
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